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The Best Way to Open a Client Letter (Part 2 of 3)

The Second Sentence – Your Conclusion


The second sentence is the most important sentence in a client letter: your CONCLUSION. Yet a client often has to read eight or ten pages to find out he has a problem. It’s as though the lawyer wants to build suspense.


A Typical Second Sentence:


The Complaint includes additional causes of action but they are derivative from the contract and overtime allegations, and we have elected not to complicate our analysis with ancillary matters. Furthermore, we do not address the legal strategies that . . . . Instead, we focus exclusively upon . . . .


I, the client, am busy. I have no time to read about how my lawyer organized her memorandum; I care about nothing, except the answer to my question: Do I have a problem? Tell me I do, tell me I don’t; then I will decide whether to keep reading.


A Better Way:


I have concluded that the vast majority of your Illinois part-time supervisors are not exempt, because they do not satisfy the “duties” tests that apply prior to January 1, 2012.


The Second Sentence should always be your CONCLUSION. If your client wants to read how you arrived at that Conclusion, he can; if he doesn’t want to, he doesn’t have to. This makes clients happy.

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