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Extra! Extra! Jack London Tries WordRake!

About twelve years ago, the editors at The Modern Library asked me to write introductions for the Jack London classics Klondike Tales and The Sea-Wolf. London’s experience and imagination were broad and vivid, his style terse and dramatic:

 

“They are more like children to him, even the hunters, and as children he treats them, descending perforce to their level and playing with them as a man plays with puppies.”

 

“The blood from his nose gushed in a scarlet stream over the feet of the helmsman.”

 

Nice, tightly-written, evocative stuff. That same summer, I taught a course at the Sun Valley Writers’ Conference on how to recognize useless words. I had just filed for a patent on teaching software how to do this; years later that patent would lead to other patents and eventually the algorithms that became the WordRake editing software. But to demonstrate the method to the Sun Valley crowd, and to prove that useless words appear even in the work of great writers, I used examples exclusively from London's The Sea-Wolf.

 

A year ago, I visited Jack London’s home. My wife and I were in the hills of Sonoma wine country at Jack London State Park where London had built “Wolf House,” a 15,000-square-foot stone monument with 26 rooms, nine chimneys, and an inside reflecting pool. When you are the most widely-read author in America, you can afford these things. But one month shy of completion, Wolf House burned, and London died at 40 before he could rebuild it, proving once again that if you want to make the gods laugh, tell them your plans.

 

As we walked around the charred ruins, I read that London liked technology. He had told the Wolf House architect in 1910 that he wanted a water heater, electric lighting, refrigeration, a built-in vacuum cleaning system, and laundry facilities including a “steam dryer rotary wringer.” When we returned from Sonoma, I wondered, Would London, the most renowned and popular writer of his time, have liked the technology in WordRake?

 

I found the old Sea-Wolf examples from Sun Valley and ran WordRake through them. Remember that London put pen to paper as one of the best writers in America; then he gave his manuscript to his wife to type and edit; then his editor at Macmillan edited what she typed and had the manuscript retyped; then a professional copy editor edited that draft line-by-line. Could there possibly be one unnecessary word left in that classic novel? I hit the “rake” button. In the Lesson box, see examples of what London and his editors missed.

 

My Notes:

 

I've always envisioned WordRake as a collaborator: seeing things we're too close to see, too tired to recognize, or don’t know to look for. And when the software highlights the dull and unnecessary words, and we accept the edits, we often see even more ways to improve a sentence. Here’s how I imagine Jack London (or you) would collaborate with WordRake:

 

1) This is a straight deletion, and London would accept it. "What was I thinking?"

 

2) After removing the four words in red, so having fewer words to consider, London sees that chanced to glance works much better as glanced. "How did my wife miss this one?"

 

3) "I especially like using that verb advertise," says London. "It gives the sentence more punch." As he accepts the two edits, of his now appears unnecessary. With the new syntax, maybe he replaces a greater strength with an even greater strength . . . .

 

4) Deleting to me is a good start, but as WordRake draws his eye to that part of the sentence, London reexamines it and realizes he could take it further: She seemed never to walk . . . . "My editors would never see that one; that's my job, to write like that."

 

5) Here’s another opportunity to improve a sentence after the WordRake edit. London might then remove the comma after the first them and delete of them: But not till the third day did we find them all . . . .

 

WordRake will not write your proposal, paper, brief, or report, but it will jumpstart your editing process and help you see ways to improve your writing you cannot see. Not every WordRake edit will be perfect--we're dealing with almost 200,000 English words and their permutations--but we will get it right 90%-95% of the time, so that whatever you send out for others to read will present you in the best light. Think about Jack London’s skill, about the layers of professional editing in The Sea-Wolf, and how WordRake still finds useless words. Now think about your own writing and the rough drafts you produce alone. Could WordRake help you do it faster and better?

 

WordRake is also available for Outlook, and I am delighted, because I know that feeling, that hesitation to hit the “Send” button: Is this good enough? What will they think of me when they read it? With WordRake in your Outlook email, you can hit “Send” with a little more confidence.

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About Gary Kinder

Gary Kinder

WordRake founder Gary Kinder has taught over 1,000 writing programs for AMLAW 100 firms, Fortune 500 companies, and government agencies. He’s also a New York Times bestselling author. As a writing expert and coach, Gary was inspired to create WordRake when he noticed a pattern in writing errors that he thought he could address with technology.

In 2012, Gary and his team of engineers created WordRake editing software to help writers produce clear, concise, and effective prose. It saves time and gives confidence. Writing and editing has never been easier.

WordRake takes you beyond the merely grammatical to the truly great—the quality editor you’ve always wanted. See for yourself.

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How Does it Work?

WordRake is editing software designed by writing expert and New York Times bestselling author Gary Kinder. Like an editor or helpful colleague, WordRake ripples through your document checking for needless words and cumbersome phrases. Its complex algorithms find and improve weak lead-ins, confusing language, and high-level grammar and usage slips.

WordRake runs in Microsoft Word and Outlook, and its suggestions appear in the familiar track-changes style. If you’ve used track changes, you already know how to use WordRake. There’s nothing to learn and nothing to interpret. Editing for clarity and brevity has never been easier.