Annie Proulx’s The Shipping News:
HERE is an account of a few years in the life of Quoyle, born in Brooklyn and raised in a shuffle of dreary upstate towns.
Hive-spangled, gut roaring with gas and cramp, he survived child-hood; at the state university, hand clapped over his chin, he camouflaged torment with smiles and silence. Stumbled through his twenties and into his thirties learning to separate his feelings from his life, counting on nothing. He ate prodigiously, liked a ham knuckle, buttered spuds.
Jim Harrison’s Legends of the Fall:
You could not tell if you were a bird descending (and there was a bird descending, a vulture) if the naked man was dead or alive.
These sentences do not come easily. Or quickly. And I realize that most of us don’t have time to craft them in our report to the department, or our memorandum for a client, or our brief to the judge. But how inspiring to know it’s possible to do this with words. And that if we stretched just a little further in that direction, perhaps that report, that memorandum, that brief, might sing to our audience in a more memorable way.
WordRake will not help us find these words. But it will help us spot the words that get in their way, so we can remove them.